Final Poem Version:
Today for me,
Is afternoon for you.
We go about our days
Parallel in play.
Across the pond,
just a skip away
For this time,
We sublime
Reflection of Writing:
After reflecting on my drafting process, I noticed a change in the tone as the week progressed. This poem is about my sister going to England for a year and a half; it progresses from when I went home over a weekend to say goodbye to her, through the day she left, and now that she’s settled at her new school. There is a sing-songy feel in the beginning drafts, but I worked on moving away from that as the drafts progressed. Throughout my poems, there’s a common theme of finding our way and being okay. The idea of rhyming through these transitions helped me build from one poem to the next with a slightly different pattern. This gave me a general structure to follow when developing the following drafts. By the end of my poem, I struggled to express how I felt now that she was settled into her new routine. I thought about how our locations are close to parallel and felt comfort in knowing we had similar routines for our academics. The final draft still holds a rhyming scheme, but in a more serious tone. I used the word ‘sublime’ to close my poem, as I feel our parallel lifestyles are inspiring and that we share a common goal in the end.
Reflection on Bookmaking:
After reflecting on my drafting process, I noticed a change in the tone as the week progressed. This poem is about my sister going to England for a year and a half; it progresses from when I went home over a weekend to say goodbye to her, through the day she left, and now that she’s settled at her new school. There is a sing-songy feel in the beginning drafts, but I worked on moving away from that as the drafts progressed. Throughout my poems, there’s a common theme of finding our way and being okay. The idea of rhyming through these transitions helped me build from one poem to the next with a slightly different pattern. This gave me a general structure to follow when developing the following drafts. By the end of my poem, I struggled to express how I felt now that she was settled into her new routine. I thought about how our locations are close to parallel and felt comfort in knowing we had similar routines for our academics. The final draft still holds a rhyming scheme, but in a more serious tone. I used the word ‘sublime’ to close my poem, as I feel our parallel lifestyles are inspiring and that we share a common goal in the end.
